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"Watch out" ! I screamed at the top of my voice; but it was already too late. Jim and I both stood there staring at the cyclist flying off his bike and hitting the enormous hole  in the road. "Is he hurt?" Jim mumbled quietly, trembling with fear. "I don't know" I whispered softly. At that moment the young man slowly lifted his head and peered at us in confusion. "What happened?" he groaned in pain. "Where am I?"

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It was a lovely sunny morning when we set off on our journey. The sky looked amazingly blue with only a few microscopic clouds on the distant horizon. The ship we travelled on was huge and had fabulous cabins. We must have been halfway there when I was roused from my nap by a evil scream. It took me a while to come to my senses, but then I saw a tiny woman in front of me, looking absolutely scared

See...? Nothing too complicated but worth the effort!!